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#1 Sailerius

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Posted 17 March 2012 - 04:54 PM

Here's a thread to dump my writing. The current writing project I'm working on is Ars Harmonia.


Ars Harmonia is a work of serial web fiction set in the same universe as Vacant Sky. So far, 13 chapters have been posted. Here's the blurb:


Human beings are transient creatures. The impermanence of life is tightly interwoven into society – the young are taught by the old so that they, in turn, can teach the next generation when the old has passed on. People are raised in a transient world.


Everything eventually breaks down. Plants wither, mountains erode, and eventually the planet itself will come to an end. The idea of impermanence is so deeply-ingrained in the minds of humans that they can scarcely comprehend something with an interminable existence.

Lurking just out of sight in the dark parts of the world, demons are a violation of this fundamental rule. Unknown to the natural cycle of life and death, demons threaten to throw the delicate structure of human society into disarray. Unable to die, they live only to consume and destroy, spreading their taint of permanence wherever they go.

But she won’t let them have their way. She has made it her duty to eliminate those which threaten the natural order of this world.


This is her story, and the story of those who have been unwittingly caught up in this ages-old conflict.


Feedback, suggestions, and complaints are welcome and wanted!



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Posted 17 March 2012 - 05:00 PM

fffffffffffffffffffff i've had this bookmarked for weeks and still havent gotten around to reading it :|

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Posted 17 March 2012 - 11:35 PM

I'm planning to start writing the next arc shortly. Feedback on what I've got so far would be greatly appreciated so I can take it into account before I start.

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Posted 23 March 2012 - 02:37 AM

Skimmed through a bit. It's admirable.

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Posted 09 April 2012 - 01:28 PM

Thanks, I think?

Chapter 22 is now out, kicking off the start of the third movement. Check it out and let me know what you think!

http://www.projectbc.net/arsharmonia/

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Posted 23 April 2012 - 01:31 PM

Action is finally starting to ramp up again with chapter 24, in which I've finally found an opportunity to slip in the main character's name.

http://www.projectbc.net/arsharmonia/

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Posted 23 April 2012 - 08:06 PM

man i have tried a bunch of times. i must have read the first couple paragraphs a bunch of times but i can just never do it. i dont even know why i used to read so much back in the day. ;-;

i mean this is big and you are cool and it totally deserves a read-through and some crits. i dont have much to say i'm mostly just posting to say that even though i've been promising forever that i would read this i still havent yet even though I TRIED :|

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Posted 26 April 2012 - 10:46 AM

Hi, within the blurb I think it wouldn't hurt to give the protagonist's name away. 'She' seems a bit too inclusive, you've already grabbed our attention (well, mine at least) so it might be a bit unnecessary to keep that hidden from us.

I've finally found an opportunity to slip in the main character's name.

Seen this just before I posted my comment haha, so it's secretive within the story too? The blurb caught my attention, I'm going to have to make sure to read this some time!

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Posted 26 April 2012 - 12:46 PM

Hi, within the blurb I think it wouldn't hurt to give the protagonist's name away. 'She' seems a bit too inclusive, you've already grabbed our attention (well, mine at least) so it might be a bit unnecessary to keep that hidden from us.

Seen this just before I posted my comment haha, so it's secretive within the story too? The blurb caught my attention, I'm going to have to make sure to read this some time!

It's not exactly a secret, but there wasn't really a natural way to fit it into the story until recently.

I hope you enjoy reading it. I welcome any and all feedback and suggestions.

Edited by Sailerius, 26 April 2012 - 12:46 PM.


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Posted 26 April 2012 - 01:01 PM

I say I want to read it, however how long it will take me to get round to it will be disgustingly long, I apologize in advance, I know how annoying it can be when people say they will comment upon you're work and they do not.

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Posted 27 April 2012 - 10:11 PM

It's not exactly a secret, but there wasn't really a natural way to fit it into the story until recently.



what? JUST USE IT.

honestly that's probably the biggest reason I just can't get into the story. "the girl" is not engaging or intersting. give her a name. you don't need to wait until she introduces herself or someone uses it. this isn't a movie. just straight-up, from the get-go, just say it.

"“I’ve done nothing wrong! What do you want from me?!” So-and-so’s desperate cries echoed in the still night of the city."

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Posted 28 April 2012 - 12:12 AM

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what? JUST USE IT.

honestly that's probably the biggest reason I just can't get into the story. "the girl" is not engaging or intersting. give her a name. you don't need to wait until she introduces herself or someone uses it. this isn't a movie. just straight-up, from the get-go, just say it.

"“I’ve done nothing wrong! What do you want from me?!” So-and-so’s desperate cries echoed in the still night of the city."

As silly as this sounds out of context, there are two characters in the first scene who aren't given names. The narrator of that scene is intentionally not identified at first for plot reasons, and the other character (who happens to be the protagonist) isn't named because the narrator of that scene doesn't know her name.

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Posted 28 April 2012 - 05:09 AM

Narrator? It's written in third-person.

AND SHE'S THE PROTAGONIST? NAME HER. (It's fine if you can't name the other one, but jesus christ dude the protagonist needs a name)

You're making up excuses, bro. Avoiding using a name in third-person narrative just because it isn't supposed to be known by the characters is a horrible HORRIBLE newbie fiction mistake. It makes everything unnecessarily hard for you, confuses readers, and makes it very difficult for them to be drawn into a story.

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Posted 28 April 2012 - 10:37 AM

True needles but not really a horrible newbie mistake. Many writers make this mistake.

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Posted 30 April 2012 - 01:03 PM

Narrator? It's written in third-person.

AND SHE'S THE PROTAGONIST? NAME HER. (It's fine if you can't name the other one, but jesus christ dude the protagonist needs a name)

You're making up excuses, bro. Avoiding using a name in third-person narrative just because it isn't supposed to be known by the characters is a horrible HORRIBLE newbie fiction mistake. It makes everything unnecessarily hard for you, confuses readers, and makes it very difficult for them to be drawn into a story.

Alrighty. I'll change it when I do a rewrite of the first few chapters, but I'm going to hold off on doing that until I've gotten enough feedback to make a rewrite worth it.

In other news, chapter 25 is now out.

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Posted 01 July 2012 - 09:37 PM

After a short hiatus, I've finally bought back the Ars Harmonia website. It's out of hiatus and chapter 26 is now out.

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Posted 15 July 2012 - 04:53 PM

Chapter 28 is out. Now back onto the main story.

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Posted 22 July 2012 - 09:20 PM

"I swear to God, I’m going to wring his neck…"

Today's a double update! Since chapter 30 is quite short, I decided to release it together with chapter 29. Two new chapters are out. Check them out here:

Chapter 29: http://www.projectbc...rstside-flight/
Chapter 30: http://www.projectbc...side-sensation/

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Posted 30 July 2012 - 11:12 PM

I don’t think I can take much more of this right now.

http://www.projectbc.net/arsharmonia/

Chapter 31 is out!

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Posted 05 August 2012 - 10:21 PM

"I know that getting involved with him is probably a bad idea, but right now, I think a bad idea is exactly what I need."

http://www.projectbc.net/arsharmonia/

Chapter 32 is out!

The story so far...

Nara is an enchantress-in-training with a penchant for mischief, particularly the sort which involves high-grade explosive magic. But she's never had to deal with trouble like Consequence before. Their chance meeting drags Nara unwittingly into a conflict with a cult known as the Virad.

After Consequence's abrupt disappearance, Nara has returned to the academy to relax and get back into the swing of everyday life. But news has recently surfaced connecting her late mother to the dark happenings of Lykken Corporation, a consumer electronics conglomerate which came under fire several years ago for egregious ethics violations in its bioarcane research. It seems that when she isn't actively seeking trouble, it's seeking her.


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