(Critique And Feedback Wanted) GuipenguinTheMaster's Stuff: Art, Music, etc.

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

This thread is for posting the Art and Music i make!

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

This is Art of the main protagonist of the game i'm making.
Their name is Shiloh.
I haven't decided their age yet, and their gender is meant to be ambiguous (like Frisk from Undertale, Kris from Deltarune or Gogo from Final Fantasy VI)
What do you guys think about the character and the design? Anything i could improve or change?

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

Here's some music i'm making for an album:

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

These are some musics i made for fun and for practice:

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

These are songs for the digital version of my card game, Cardoom:

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

Here's some music i'm making for an album:

These were made with Beepbox:

BeepBox

BeepBox is an online tool for sketching and sharing instrumental music.

www.beepbox.co

The rest were made with FL STUDIO.

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

Any ideas or feedback?

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

This is Jet. He is the mascot of the card game i made, Cardoom.

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

This is another song for the digital version of my card game:



It's the longest song i've made yet, and one of the most complex!

 

[Kyleman]

View attachment 237013This is Art of the main protagonist of the game i'm making.
Their name is Shiloh.
I haven't decided their age yet, and their gender is meant to be ambiguous (like Frisk from Undertale, Kris from Deltarune or Gogo from Final Fantasy VI)
What do you guys think about the character and the design? Anything i could improve or change?

Overall, I really like it, particurarly the color choice. I'm not an expert graphic designer but there were two things that crossed my mind - First, if you'd want your character to be more of a silent fill-in for the player, you might want to simplify their facial features. Second, you might also want to add one small shape/detail that will make them more recognizable, like a hair accessory or something along those lines.

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

Overall, I really like it, particurarly the color choice. I'm not an expert graphic designer but there were two things that crossed my mind - First, if you'd want your character to be more of a silent fill-in for the player, you might want to simplify their facial features. Second, you might also want to add one small shape/detail that will make them more recognizable, like a hair accessory or something along those lines.

Thanks for replying!

I'm glad you liked them! I'll keep the comment about the colors in mind.

I'm still unsure if i want them to be a fill-in, because they will star in a co-op game, so every character will sort of be one, but at the same time i want each of the characters to have their own personalities. Shiloh will be the most silent one though.

About the second point, do you specifically mean something for the character's head, their sillhouette, or just in general?

 

[Kyleman]

I'm still unsure if i want them to be a fill-in, because they will star in a co-op game, so every character will sort of be one, but at the same time i want each of the characters to have their own personalities. Shiloh will be the most silent one though.

If there's more characters to play as, you probably don't need to simplify anything.

About the second point, do you specifically mean something for the character's head, their sillhouette, or just in general?

Most people who know a lot about character design and stuff would say it's best to add something to the head, though personally, I think upper portion of the body is fine too. You want an eye-catching shape somewhere where people are most likely to look, and in case of characters, it's usually the head.

 

[HexMozart88]

So, I like the design of Shiloh, but I do have some things to point out regarding the art itself.

- The pose is pretty stiff, and I think that's mostly because of the way you probably went about drawing the body. From what I can see, you likely drew the shoulders and then just drew lines at a random location to separate the arms from the body. Don't do that. The body should not be a square. Even androgynous bodies have a sort of curve to them, and the arms usually aren't pressed against the sides. Look up some pics of androgynous bodies to see what I mean.
- The shoelaces are not in perspective. At the angle of the shoes you've drawn, the laces would be more aligned with the side and not just in the centre.
- You're doing the thing a lot of beginner artists do and that's drawing the body crooked. If you draw a line straight down from the top of their head to the bottom of their feet, you'll see it doesn't align. This is more of a practice thing, but it's something you'll eventually need to know to not be considered a beginner artist anymore.
- I'm not sure if the crosshatching on the hair is supposed to be shading or if it's meant to be like, strands, but your style looks pretty simple and so trying to add details like that just kind of throws the style off.
- The hands. I do like that you're attempting to draw hands instead of just hiding them, but they appear to just be fingers awkwardly attached to the wrist. What I had to do and what I think you should do is practice drawing hands by themselves before you even think about drawing them on a full-body portrait.
- The eyelashes are kind of huge and make the character look too feminine. Most simple styles like yours have very little eyelashes to speak of in non-female characters.

Things I do like:
- The nose and the lips are great. The nose really has depth to it.
- The colours are actually not bad. The blue and the yellow really compliment each other.

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

If there's more characters to play as, you probably don't need to simplify anything.


Most people who know a lot about character design and stuff would say it's best to add something to the head, though personally, I think upper portion of the body is fine too. You want an eye-catching shape somewhere where people are most likely to look, and in case of characters, it's usually the head.

Ah, that makes sense. I'll probably make their bowtie bigger so it looks a little more iconic.

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

So, I like the design of Shiloh, but I do have some things to point out regarding the art itself.

- The pose is pretty stiff, and I think that's mostly because of the way you probably went about drawing the body. From what I can see, you likely drew the shoulders and then just drew lines at a random location to separate the arms from the body. Don't do that. The body should not be a square. Even androgynous bodies have a sort of curve to them, and the arms usually aren't pressed against the sides. Look up some pics of androgynous bodies to see what I mean.
- The shoelaces are not in perspective. At the angle of the shoes you've drawn, the laces would be more aligned with the side and not just in the centre.
- You're doing the thing a lot of beginner artists do and that's drawing the body crooked. If you draw a line straight down from the top of their head to the bottom of their feet, you'll see it doesn't align. This is more of a practice thing, but it's something you'll eventually need to know to not be considered a beginner artist anymore.
- I'm not sure if the crosshatching on the hair is supposed to be shading or if it's meant to be like, strands, but your style looks pretty simple and so trying to add details like that just kind of throws the style off.
- The hands. I do like that you're attempting to draw hands instead of just hiding them, but they appear to just be fingers awkwardly attached to the wrist. What I had to do and what I think you should do is practice drawing hands by themselves before you even think about drawing them on a full-body portrait.
- The eyelashes are kind of huge and make the character look too feminine. Most simple styles like yours have very little eyelashes to speak of in non-female characters.

Things I do like:
- The nose and the lips are great. The nose really has depth to it.
- The colours are actually not bad. The blue and the yellow really compliment each other.

First off: I'm glad you liked their design!
This is a very large piece of feedback so i'll reply to it later when i have more time.

 

[GuipenguinTheMaster]

So, I like the design of Shiloh, but I do have some things to point out regarding the art itself.

- The pose is pretty stiff, and I think that's mostly because of the way you probably went about drawing the body. From what I can see, you likely drew the shoulders and then just drew lines at a random location to separate the arms from the body. Don't do that. The body should not be a square. Even androgynous bodies have a sort of curve to them, and the arms usually aren't pressed against the sides. Look up some pics of androgynous bodies to see what I mean.
- The shoelaces are not in perspective. At the angle of the shoes you've drawn, the laces would be more aligned with the side and not just in the centre.
- You're doing the thing a lot of beginner artists do and that's drawing the body crooked. If you draw a line straight down from the top of their head to the bottom of their feet, you'll see it doesn't align. This is more of a practice thing, but it's something you'll eventually need to know to not be considered a beginner artist anymore.
- I'm not sure if the crosshatching on the hair is supposed to be shading or if it's meant to be like, strands, but your style looks pretty simple and so trying to add details like that just kind of throws the style off.
- The hands. I do like that you're attempting to draw hands instead of just hiding them, but they appear to just be fingers awkwardly attached to the wrist. What I had to do and what I think you should do is practice drawing hands by themselves before you even think about drawing them on a full-body portrait.
- The eyelashes are kind of huge and make the character look too feminine. Most simple styles like yours have very little eyelashes to speak of in non-female characters.

Things I do like:
- The nose and the lips are great. The nose really has depth to it.
- The colours are actually not bad. The blue and the yellow really compliment each other.

The reason the pose looks so stiff is because i was going for a model sheet kind of look. The arms are inexcusable, but the reason the body looks so square is because of the style i was going for, like the characters from the Epic Battle Fantasy Series (I can share a picture if you want). It's good to know that it doesn't look that good so i can change it though.

Yeah the shoelaces look weird. I don't really know how to draw them super well.

Do you think adding a line in the middle and then erasing it well help make the drawing less crooked?

The crosshatching on the hair is meant to be shading and i only added it because the hair looked weird without it. It was a last minutes addition that didn't really work that well lol.

The hands look bad, i agree. I hadn't noticed it, but i can draw hands better than that. I'll be sure to fix it in the final design.

I was thinking about putting 4 eyelashes on each of the females' eyes and no eyelashes on male characters' eyes, and since Shiloh is ambiguous i put 2 on them. Maybe they are too big though.

The nose and lips are probably good because i love drawing faces and so i praticed a lot on it.

I'm glad you liked the colors, people seem to enjoy that part of the drawing a lot.

Anyway, thank you very much for the critique! I'll keep it in mind.