Not sure if trolling or serious.
Cool story, bro.
But in all seriousness, presentation is everything. Repeated from above, an attractive thread, peppered with colorful an entertaining snapshots of your game, will help to make people take a second look. Further, writing is also important, as you must differentiate your game from every other one solely with your words via description of setting, characters, etc.
Make your thread not only entertaining to look at, but fun to read as well. Put the reader, albeit briefly, into your world through your synopsis; though the more experienced you are with writing, the easier it will be to charge your words with energy. A list of your game's strong points and/or unique features is also useful.
Now, having looked at your thread, it surely lacks presentation. You could use some snapshots to liven up your other sections, such as some comical point of your game could go to "Genre". I personally vote you place your Winnie the Pooh creature right there. It is indeed funny!
Flesh out your gameplay section. Do not presume we all know what a JRPG or CTB battle system is. Also, do you have any other gameplay features outside of the battle system?
You could add a graphic for your characters and give more insight into them. Not necessarily writing a novel about them, but one sentence, while you've written it concisely, could be fleshed out more.
All in all, the thread is very basic, if not plain apart from the screenshots. You could add much more personality to it.