I want your opinion on my game, please.

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So I decided I wanted to make a romance game with multiple paths, and I wanted to here everyone's opinion of it.

The Story takes place around a high school boy named, Isaac.

It starts off with him being released from a Juvenile Detention Center (for reasons that will later be explained through out the game) he is sent back to school the next day, through out the first day, you'll meet a hand full of people, different events will take place and you'll get

to make decisions for each one.

As the Tag says, it is a romance, there are five girls to have romances with, (I am considering adding more) Each girl will have five main

events in the game, and to get the best ending with the girl of your choose, you have to complete all these events.

The city it all takes place in is a imaginary city named Mountain Town, because it is on top of a mountain.

Isaac is in ways a depressing person, he always seems to have a gloomy expression, He lives with his Sister sense his mother is dead,

and his Father travels for business.

He has a good relation with his sister, Tanya, but he can be a brat.

Characters

Isaac:

A Highschool Student accused of a crime, he claims he didn't comit.

He had a positive attitude before JDC, but now he's very gloomy.

Alex:

Childhood friend of Isaac, him and Isaac are still good pals, but at times things get awkward.

Marie:

Another Childhood friend of Isaac, for a long time, Isaac wished to start dating her, eventually they started dating, but broke up after

he got put in JDC.

She is a very nice and gentle girl, she is the Student Body President, and takes her position serious.

Elizabeth:

A extremely shy girl (caused by getting bullied) who is missing one eye, she lost it in a car accident, this same accident also damaged

her heart, so she commonly misses school and stays in the hospital.

Cindy:

A really bubbly girl, who loves anime and cosplaying, she is most commonly seen with her hair done like Hatsune Miku's.

Takeo:

A Japanese foreign exchange student, because of his big size and rebel look, people commonly mistake him for a trouble maker.

He barely talks (Cause he isn't good at English) but he is also caring, and looks out for the weak.

Sam:

A cowgirl raised on a farm, her family sold their farm and opened up a restaurant, where she can commonly be found.

She is very wild and outgoing.

Jessie:

A bookworm who works as the librarian, She is shy but not as badly as Elizabeth, she loves to talk about books, and prefer's the books to movie adaptions.

Chris:

A boy who is on bad terms with Isaac for a reason, they both refuse to tell.

At a time they were friends and were in a band together.

Jaycee:

Captain of the Cheer Team, she is Alex's little sister.

She is very flirtatious and wild.

Those are all the important characters, please forgive me if I didn't put down enough info, I'm new to writing all this stuff down.Title.jpgSam1.pngeli1.jpg
 
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Well, for me it's hard to give my opinion on your game based on this alone. It just sounds like a simple romance game. I guess the backstory of Isaac is pretty interesting, but other than that, I'd really have to try the game for myself to think much more of it.
 

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At the moment there is no game to give an opinion on.  We have an outline of several characters, but no indication of how you intend to implement your story, what will be the mechanics of it and so on.  Perhaps a bit of detail on that would help people give an informed opinion.
 

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Sorry it took me so long to get back on this, I agree with most of you, I am no good with romance games.

I'm just doing it has a project.
 

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Sorry it took me so long to get back on this, I agree with most of you, I am no good with romance games.

I'm just doing it has a project.
I would highly recommend finding a romance game you like, or someone who has made a romance game to help you then.  Picking a genre at random and then expecting people to be interested in it is a bit of a folly.

If you are going to be doing this as a project then you'll need to research a little more.  Romance games are built on trust, activity, and gifts.  

It looks like you only explained the main purpose of the game to get with one of the girls.  Can you give us any motivation?  Does Isaac not want to be depressed, are the girls helping him in some way with his return to society, or did people shun him and the girls his only option for social activity?

What can the player hope to experience here?  Will we be getting anything per romance?  What's the advantage of one girl over the other?  Are there classes to attend which segments the day?  Is the activity limited in anyway per day?  What's the cut off point of a relationship?

We need a lot more information to make any judgement.  
 
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The different Girls all have different stories, but there is one girl that helps him make friends again.
 

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I realiz that it's very bad and I don't have enough so I've been working on it a lot more hoping I can make it better, I appreciate all your opinions!
 

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