FREE I'm thinking about Japanese proofreading

[kugayama]

First of all,　I'm Japanese. So I'm not good at English.


Recently, I'm thinking about Japanese proofreading.

There are sites in Japan where you can sell doujin games like DLsite and FANZA.

Since the doujin game market in Japan is large, the number of overseas producers selling is increasing.

I feel happy for this.


However, it is often sold in unnatural Japanese using such as google translate.

So I thought it would be useful by means of "proofreading".

Not a "translation"

I'm not good at English, so it's difficult to be useful by translation.


In other words, I am going to translate the roughly translated Japanese into sentences that are not unnatural for a native Japanese person to see.


It's still in the planning stage...
If anyone wants to sell paid works to Japanese people, please contact me!

https://twitter.com/sGZvlLOUYjiK3W6

クガヤマ＠日本語校正プロフィール - Ci-en

I accept proofreading of doujin works etc！

ci-en.net

This is my first time using a forum like this, so I'm sorry if something goes wrong. 　 (´・ω・`)

 

[BreakerZero]

This sounds like a good idea. I might throw a few your way and see what sticks.

 

[kugayama]

If you have a request, please feel free to email me. 　: D

 

[EpicFILE]

It seems like an interesting idea, hope I understand the idea properly:
So let's say I have a game in English, but I want to sell it to Japanese market.
I can create a rough Japanese version via google translate and give it to you for proper translation.
Is it correct?

Correct me if I'm wrong.

 

[kugayama]

It seems like an interesting idea, hope I understand the idea properly:
So let's say I have a game in English, but I want to sell it to Japanese market.
I can create a rough Japanese version via google translate and give it to you for proper translation.
Is it correct?

Correct me if I'm wrong.

Yes you are correct!

 

[kugayama]

It would be helpful if you could give me the original text when you request.

Also, for simple sentences, google translate is good, but for difficult literary sentences, I recommend Deepl.　(^o^)

 

[raffle]

Thank you for this I will definitely contact you on twitter a few months from now, you're a lifesaver!

 

[kugayama]

Thank you for this I will definitely contact you on twitter a few months from now, you're a lifesaver!

I'm looking forward to it！

 

[kugayama]

I take requests for everything, such as text for Japanese introductory pages!

 

[PixeLockeT]

I have a question.

Do you "translate" (proofread) song lyrics while trying to keep the syllables the same/similar in number for easy singing? Or would that be too difficult for you to do?

 

[kugayama]

I have a question.

Do you "translate" (proofread) song lyrics while trying to keep the syllables the same/similar in number for easy singing? Or would that be too difficult for you to do?

I don't have any experience, so it's going to be a challenge, but I don't think it's impossible to do it.

 

[PixeLockeT]

I don't have any experience, so it's going to be a challenge, but I don't think it's impossible to do it.

Here's the Japanese text from Deepl:

Spoiler: Japanese Lyric

肥大した静脈のようにそこに線が脈打つ
暗闇の中で
間欠的に

此処では光は恥ずかしげもなく消えていく
この心を記憶の切れ目のない裂け目に導く
時間のリズムに合わせて細い線を描く

片手は確実に前に出す
大胆に力を込めて突き進む
前にも後ろにも走れるタイムライン
これが人生の覚醒の鍵

死んだ目を開けて
荒れ狂う嘘を炙り出す
疑似空洞を突き破らせてもう一度見よう
(命の芯まで)
死ぬほどの恐怖と痛み
きょくきょくかんじょう
視界に回転するホライゾン
暴力的に呼び出す

And the original English:

Spoiler: English Lyric

A line pulses there like a bloated vein
Within the dark
Intermittently

Here the light shamelessly recedes
Leading this heart into a seamless chasm of memory
Thin line drawn across in rhythm of time

One hand placed forward surely
Boldly surging with power
A timeline that can run forward or back
This is the key to life awakening

Open these dead eyes
Sear through raging lies
Let them pierce through the pseudo void to see once more
(To life's core)
Fear and pain to die
Polar feelings rise
Horizon spinning into view
Violently calling

If this is something you can do, tell me. ^^ (It is fine if you can't do it.)

 

[kugayama]

Here's the Japanese text from Deepl:

Spoiler: Japanese Lyric

肥大した静脈のようにそこに線が脈打つ
暗闇の中で
間欠的に

此処では光は恥ずかしげもなく消えていく
この心を記憶の切れ目のない裂け目に導く
時間のリズムに合わせて細い線を描く

片手は確実に前に出す
大胆に力を込めて突き進む
前にも後ろにも走れるタイムライン
これが人生の覚醒の鍵

死んだ目を開けて
荒れ狂う嘘を炙り出す
疑似空洞を突き破らせてもう一度見よう
(命の芯まで)
死ぬほどの恐怖と痛み
きょくきょくかんじょう
視界に回転するホライゾン
暴力的に呼び出す

And the original English:

Spoiler: English Lyric

A line pulses there like a bloated vein
Within the dark
Intermittently

Here the light shamelessly recedes
Leading this heart into a seamless chasm of memory
Thin line drawn across in rhythm of time

One hand placed forward surely
Boldly surging with power
A timeline that can run forward or back
This is the key to life awakening

Open these dead eyes
Sear through raging lies
Let them pierce through the pseudo void to see once more
(To life's core)
Fear and pain to die
Polar feelings rise
Horizon spinning into view
Violently calling

If this is something you can do, tell me. ^^ (It is fine if you can't do it.)

May I listen to the song and make a decision?

Also, we shouldn't talk too much about personal matters here, so I'd like you to get in touch with me on twitter.

 

[PixeLockeT]

May I listen to the song and make a decision?

Also, we shouldn't talk too much about personal matters here, so I'd like you to get in touch with me on twitter.

I don't really use Twitter much anymore. But I will get on to message you, except I don't have the song with the vocals in it yet, only the instrumental. I do have a music sketch version that has a lead instrument with how the melody goes though.