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NEW Killer Gin Shinata Intro!!! (WIP)
(Narrator) She breathed in and savored the rare relaxing moment. The wind slowly rustled her long hair as she sat peacefully enjoying the sun as it warmed her spirit.
Suddenly the faint sound of a giggle and the smell of croissants invaded Shinata’s senses, it could only mean one thing.
(Shinata) Pleeeease, not right now. All I wanted was 10 minutes.
Shinata peered down the hill towards the village.. And her fears were confirmed. Up the hill came the councilman’s son, and Shinata’s biggest fan, Gordo. Nothing could dull the boy’s shamelessly adoring smile and the excitement plastered across his face as he plodded up the hill to see her.
(Shinata) What do you want Gordo? Shinata sighed... the sooner he is done, the sooner she can get back to enjoying a relaxing afternoon in peace.
(Shinata) I swear this better be quick or important.
(Even if Doctor strange checked 14 million+ possible futures, this was no chance… lol (not included!))
(Gordo) I just wanted to see how you’re doing. Wow, you look as good as a cinnamon bun!
Gordo has a weird mixture of hunger and love in his eyes.
(Shinata) Do you want me to throw up? Once again!... I am not a sugary treat, I am not YOUR sugary treat, or princess or sweetheart, or anything that starts with love or ends in cute animals.
(Gordo) You should relax, you seemed stressed out.... Honey bun, I actually came here because I think you would really be interested in what the councilmen are saying.
(Shinata) What do you mean?
Shinata fought the urge to punch Gordo in the gut for referring to her as a sugary treat
(Gordo) All I know is that my dad was saying some weird things today and mumbling about an important meeting... And I know the perfect spot where we could eavesdrop on what they're saying. Hehe.
Shinata was really not in the mood to deal with Gordo today, but curiosity got the best of her, the council has been acting strange lately.
(Shinata)Ok, let’s go.
Gordo is ecstatic!
(Shinata)And wipe the drool off your lips!
(Gordo) Yay! It’s a Date! Come and find me behind council hall!
Gordo jumped in the air, it was a pitiful jump, not even an inch off the ground, but by the Gods, it was the highest he could manage.
(Shinata) It’s NOT a DATE.
Gordo quickly spun on his heels and traipsed back in the direction of the village, with extra pep in his step.
Shinata shook her head but couldn’t help but smile as she watched Gordo stroll back in the direction of the village, chest puffed into the air.
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Hi! I wanted to take a look at this and gave the demo a shot to give a little feedback.
It's clear that a huge amount of time and effort went into this from the general depth and complexity of the different systems, the amount of graphical assets and the voice acting. I'm not sure whether this is a big group effort or not, but either or not, all the hard work really shows! The voice acting in particular really sets it apart from other RMMV projects.
I do have a couple of critiques based on what I saw. I didn't play terribly far, but these two things struck me as off;
One: Shinata's "Caramel Skin". Now, disclaimer: I am white, not a person of colour, and I am not an expert. However, I have seen a lot of discourse around the tendency to describe the skin tone of POC by reference to food, Caramel, Chocolate, Coffee, etc. and there is a little baggage around it. I'm not going to go deep on it, if you're interested you should be able to find discussion by googling "describe people of colours' skin as food", suffice it to say a lot of people have had thoughts about it and I, personally, would stray away from this language.
In addition to that, Shinata's skin does not appear to be caramel coloured in the game's artwork.
Two: the character of Gordo feels intensely fatphobic. It seems that no line of text about Gordo can pass without referring to the fact that he's fat, and this is disgusting. It's incredibly mean spirited. Gordo's behaviour towards Shinata *is* gross - he ignores her signals and pushes boundaries - but because his weight is really focused on, it feels as if the script thinks his behaviour is gross because he is fat. It is not. I closed the demo at the point wherein Gordo tried to sniff Shinata's hair, because it just felt too gross.
I feel a little bad offering this critique since, first, neither of these are really gameplay issues, and second, they're both voice acted, so they're difficult to change without a lot of effort or sacrificing someone's performance. I would prefer to comment on the game's systems and mechanics- of which there are plenty! - but these aspects of the game's content, the second one especially, really dominated my experience with the demo, mentally.
Sorry to be a bit negative! I do think this looks like a very expansive game with a lot of depth to it and it looks like it's already enjoying deserved popularity. I hope it continues to improve!
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