Moon of Discord - Upcoming commercial game

[Tuomo L]

In a world gone crazy, how long will you survive? 

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Our story begins at the dawn of a new era.​

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Humanity has achieved marvelous technological feats,​

even though some still insist on clinging to the old ​

mystical ways.​

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Yet, nothing compares to the newest and  boldest ​

of human inventions... ​

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The very first manned moonflight.​

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But this is not the story about how the first flight​

to the moon happened. ​

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Rather, it's a story of what it meant for humanity ​

as well as for the fate of the entire universe...​

You take the role of Yasmine, the strongest woman in the world, who has lived her entire life in harsh mountains.  One day a rocket crashes through her roof, a monster had attacked it.  Not liking this fact, Yasmine demands that Linda, the girl riding the rocket, pay for all the damage.  The girl promises to do so – if she is escorted back to her village safely.  Yasmine reluctantly agrees, seeing as her home is otherwise left in ruins.  But was this all just a random monster attack, or could there be something far more sinister behind it?

Characters

There are tons of unique characters in this game, here are several of them!

Yasmine

Renowned as the strongest woman in the world, Yasmine enjoys a peaceful life in descolate mountains which comes to sudden halt when Linda crashes the rocket into her home. Can crush a stone with her bare hands and hits like a truck.

Linda

A brilliant engineer and technician, Linda's greatest pride was making the moon rocket. Quirky and eccentric, she is able to make many gadgets and turn several items into other sorts of items to help the party.

 

Frances

 

 

Despite being already 60 years old she is still in peak physical health due to a lifetime of training. Renowned as a superb swordsman, Frances began to study magic to help combine her skill in sword arts as well as magic. She starts at the highest level of any character and the only thing that holds her back is her very slow exp growth rate.

Jamia Ironheart

A pirate centaur who starts out as somewhat evil and clashes with the heroes, however after many turns of events she may join your party depending on the way you play. Due to her unique aspect, she has bit of mix of all the other character classes, meaning she is a great addition to any party.

 

Screenshots

With placeholder graphics until custom resources are ready

 

 

Video

 

Early gameplay footage

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LFeE-gxZjoM

 

[Kes]

Some interesting ideas.  Just a couple of points:

Francis with an "i" is the male version of the name.  Your character is female, so it is Frances.

To have a project description so thickly littered with spelling mistakes and poor grammar does not inspire confidence in the quality of your eventual story.  I suggest you edit and clean it up to create a better impression.

 

[Tuomo L]

Some interesting ideas.  Just a couple of points:

Francis with an "i" is the male version of the name.  Your character is female, so it is Frances.

Oh, ok.

To have a project description so thickly littered with spelling mistakes and poor grammar does not inspire confidence in the quality of your eventual story.  I suggest you edit and clean it up to create a better impression.

English is my third language. What mistakes did I make and how was my grammar poor?

 

[Kes]

I'll put it in a spoiler.  I had hoped to be able to highlight the words I suggest you change, but couldn't see how to do that, so I've had to do strikethrough.  I have also amended the punctuation in a couple of places.

Spoiler

Our story begins at the dawn of a new era.​

 ​

 ​

Humanity has reached (achieved) marvelous technological feats,​

even though some still insist on clinging on(to) the old ​

mystical ways.​

 ​

 ​

Yet, nothing compares to the newest and the(delete, not needed) boldest ​

of the (delete, not needed) human inventions... ​

 ​

 ​

The very first manned moonflight.​

 ​

 ​

But this is not the story about how the first flight​

to the moon happened. ​

 ​

 ​

Rather, it's a story(of) what it meant for the (delete, not needed ) humanity ​

as well as for the fate of the entire universe...​

You take the role of Yasmine, the strongest woman in the world who has her entire life lived in harsh mountains. One day, a rocket crashes through her roof, a monster attacked the rocket flight. Not liking on this fact, she demands Linda, the girl riding the rocket to pay for all the damages. The girl promises to do so, if she's escorted back to her village safely, Yasmine recucantly agrees seeing as her home is otherwise left in ruins. But was this all just a random monster attack or could there be something far more sinister behind it?

(Easier to re-write the paragraph than add the amendments)

You take the role of Yasmine, the strongest woman in the world, who has lived her entire life in harsh mountains.  One day a rocket crashes through her roof, (here I got a bit confused.  You cannot attack a rocket flight as that is a verb, so I assume you mean…) and a monster attacks it.  Not liking this fact, she demands that Linda, the girl riding the rocket, pay for all the damage.  The girl promises to do so – if she is escorted back to her village safely.  Yasmine reluctantly agrees, seeing as her home is otherwise left in ruins.  But was this all just a random monster attack, or could there be something far more sinister behind it?

Characters

There are tons of unique characters in this game, here are several of them!

Renowned as the strongest woman in the world, Yasmine enjoys peaceful life at descolate (enjoys a peaceful life in desolate) mountains which comes to sudden halt when Linda crashes the rocket into her home. Can crush a stone with (her) bare hands and hits like a truck.

Frances

Despite being already 60 years old she is still in peak physical health due to a lifetime of training. Renowned as a superb swordsman, Frances began to study magic to help combine her skill in sword arts as well as magic. She starts at (the) highest level of any character and the only thing that holds her back is her very slow exp growth rate.

Hope this helps.

 

[NPC]

This project really excites me. The art is fantastic so far, the story intriguing...but is this an all-girls world or something? I mean, you only have four characters shown...but there are no males anywhere is sight. Just wondering.

 

[Tuomo L]

This project really excites me. The art is fantastic so far, the story intriguing...but is this an all-girls world or something? I mean, you only have four characters shown...but there are no males anywhere is sight. Just wondering.

It's not all girls world but me and the artist thought it'd make things interesting to make majority of the cast females and it'd make it stray from the norm. There are few male heroes too and they have just as much of a use as the females.

 

[L'Antipatico 2.0]

Awesome art style and masculine girls...kinda original, I'll keep an eye on it.

 

[Tuomo L]

Here's an early WIP for two possibilities for a cut in for Yasmine, what do you guys think? Looks like a good idea? Which do you think would be better? 

 

[cosmickitty]

Kinda depends on how you plan to set up your battle system... Side view i like the front, but the traditional rm setup probably the back. Id kinda like to see something a little more dynamic though maybe in the middle of swinging or something

 

[Tuomo L]

Introducing a new character finally desgined for the game.

Meet Gloria, the cleric of the game and the final part of the bread and butter of most rpgs. Unlikes those sissy healing priests who wear only cloth, clerics are front row healers and have always been heavily armored. Gloria wields maces with holy runes to add to their powers. She is a woman in her early 30's, eager to join the party to vanguish the evil. 

 

[cosmickitty]

neat-o... but pirate centaur is still my favorite

 

[Dalph]

What the...this looks awesome! Gotta love these characters...ahah

 

[Tuomo L]

I've been telling the whole time that there are men in this game too, right? Well, allow me to give a sneak preview of one of the main male heroes, named Kuro. I'm still kinda working out his class and such skill ideas though. Any suggestions are welcome!

Arts drawn by in order from top to bottom

- Invokee

- Don'tcallmepanda

- Jorsu

- Vexlogue

 

[NPC]

I like the fact that the men are so puny, compared to the females...I can't help wonder how some of those girls even walk! XD I really like the new male character's style (and he's stylin'!)...kind of makes me think of changlings...with the ears and all. Idk. Just trying my best to input.

 

[cosmickitty]

Not sure why... but he looks like an archer to me... maybe it's his robin hood-ish vibe

 

[Tuomo L]

I like the fact that the men are so puny, compared to the females...I can't help wonder how some of those girls even walk! XD I really like the new male character's style (and he's stylin'!)...kind of makes me think of changlings...with the ears and all. Idk. Just trying my best to input.

Puny...?  

 

[NPC]

Lol, sry, I should have said slim. 

I'm not even gonna lie. I have no idea what I'm saying.

EDIT: I meant the one in particular...I don't see how it changes anything I really said...gah. Now I feel bad. :/