[Puzzle Game] NightMare (free)

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    MY FIRST INDIE GAME
    Title : NightMare
    Developer / Publisher / Writer : Ung Hoang Phi Dang
    Genre: Puzzle
    Status: In Development
    Engine : RPG Maker VX ACE
    Language: English , VietNamese
    Visit Game’s Web Site : https://uhpdgames.itch.io/


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    The story is about an ordinary secondary school student, Dang.
    There were some bad days.
    Dang left his home & wanderred because of his addiction in gaming.
    On an unexpected day, he ended up meeting & making friend with a girl,Nhung.
    She has changed the bad characteristics of Dang.
    • Chapter 1:Story of Love.
    • Chapter 2:Mysterious Dreams.
    • Chapter 3: Revealing the Secrets.
    Trailer :

    Gameplay :

    Walkthrough :


    Screenshot :

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    - Script by :
    Ung Hoang Phi Dang
    V.M of D.T
    Neon Black
    Enterbrain
    TheoAllen
    Moghunter
    Yanfly
    Thiago
    Galv's
    Khas

    Goodbye to Tongpok
    Searching my life
    Solitude’s garden
    Sorrow Revisited
    SadBallerina
    Jump

    Available Download : December 1 , 2014
    DOWNLOAD HERE
     
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    Hello! I left a short review/let's play of your game.  I hope you don't take it the wrong way. I set out with good intentions but unfortunately, I wasn't able to get past the first task and it went downhill from there. I don't know if something is glitched, or if I missed something obvious, but even if I had progressed, it plays like it is your very first RPG maker game, and that is OK but it needs a lot of polish. Also, I can tell English isn't your first language, so you need to find a friend to correct the dialogue and descriptions to that they make sense. I feel like there is definitely potential, and the screenshots in your thread and description of the story are what led me to download it in the first place. I hope you take this feedback to make the game better so I can try it again at a later date



    (Note, it is currently still processing). If you just want to skip to my review part, its at the end of the video around 15:50
     
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    Nightmare V_1.2

    Let's take a look.

    This game is packed well, less than 50MB are needed to be downloaded.

    It's uploaded on Gamejolt, so I consider it as a full finished game.

    Also posted on RPG Maker Forums  → Projects  → Completed Games

     

    This should be more like a 0.2 version though.   :(

    No offence but the game is like it never really got playtested.  :(

    It is in a very bad condition, if you play the English version that is.

    I will not try the other version, but just to know, English version counts as shovelware.

    And this makes me sad.  :(

     

    It really is. Because I have to be honest. :(

    I know this is your first game.  :)

    Well done and congratulations.  :)   :thumbsup-right:

    I do not want to discourage you from making games, but I have also to be honest with you.  :)

    Please take my review as friendly as you can, and as a few suggestions on what to fix.  :)

    Otherwise, please do not read it.  :|

     

     

    What is this? A warning copyright note with typos and wrong copyright statements?   :o

    "All by myself" what does that mean? Are you alone? Or did you mean you made everything yourself? You got a readme with credits but failed to add them in the game, putting though a strange claim.

    WHERE ARE THE RPG MAKER CREDITS TO ENTERBRAIN?   :o

    For a so copyright concerned guy, this is not the correct way to do stuff.

    This is in my opinion the first thinig you should fix and give proper credits instead of warning before even start.

     

    I selected English.

    After all publishing a game, means you got it in its final form. Thus English version is ready too right?

    After selecting Englihs I have to select story among two (names?) that I have no idea what is what.

    The paper background grapgic is nice by the way. :)  

    The music is pretty.   :)

     

    Okay, the map is rolling around, well directed, nice, let's see now.  :)

    I got no idea why lights are suddenly out.  >_>

    The game is full of typos in the English version, but I can undertand this is an attempt to make such a game in both languages and English is not your native. No problem. 

     

    A picture "Copmuter Games Assosciation" and something not in English. This is somewhat out of place don't you think? :|

     

    I got a flashlight but it is still too dark to read something.  >_>

    And we need no lantern. Flashlight is brighter.  >_>

    But still we can not see what is written on the wall, or see anything else.  >_>

    Why is that?  :(

    This seems unpolished and untested eventing really. :(

    Why are only the green arrows passable to the next map?  :(

    And why are there so many obstacles on floor, making places unpassable. Did you tested your game before releasing it? I am above the sholvel, FACING the shovel, pressing action I jump to the right. And after 15 minuites, I can say that this can be classified as a shovelware game. :(   :(   :(   

    I am really sorry but it is, at its current state.  :stare:

     

    I have to suggest you a few things if you don't mind:

    Please:

    First of all ) Fix plagiarism and copyright statements.  :o  

    a) Fix any passability errors.  ;)

    B) Fix english events.  ;)

    c) Try making a little better maps using more appropriate graphics.  ;)

    d) Make sure the player knows what to do.   ;)

     

    I KNOW IT IS YOUR FIRST INDIE GAME.

    Congratulations on finishing it.  :thumbsup-left:   :)   :thumbsup-right:

    Now you have to polish it.

    To fix it, to make it good.

    Do you understand what I try to tell you here?

     

     

    You are on a good way to make something nice. 

    But this feels like a pre-alpha demo STILL Under Development.  :(

     

    You have to fix a lot of things.

     

    Finish fixing your game and I will review again with better rating.  ;)   ;)   ;)

     

    For now, I am really sorry for reviewing this as a bad game, but I have to be honest and fair with you.  :|

     

     

    Graphics: 30/100

    Mapping skills are not the best I have seen, many obstackles make big parts of the map unpassable and the transition from map to other map is 1 tile only. Many graphics used, didn't saw any credits for them anywhere. Enterbrain credits are missing too. Anyway.

     

     

    Sound FX: 70/100

    Sound FX are appropritate.

     

     

    Music: 80/100

    Music is nice. Works well and passes a calm and sad feeling.

     

     

    Gameplay: 10/100

    I don't know what to do and also the game goes against common sense and logic.

    I mean, flashlight is brighter than lantern, fireplace emmits no light and flashlight is not enough to help me read or see anything.

     

    Scenario: 10/100

    I played only for 15 minutes, I got no idea what this is all about. 

    (wanted to exit in the first five minutes but tried some things out)

     

     

    Directed: 10/100

    You should fix the game really. 

    Light effects must be used better.

    Also you should make it a little better on presentation.

    Fixing the rest of the game can raise this value.

     

    Atmosphere: 10/100

    The game is not ready to pass any atmosphere.

     

     

    Polished: 10/100

     

    Unpolished really.

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    Bottomline: 29/100

     

    Sorry once more I was so strict on you.  :(

     
     
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    @starcrescendo ty !

    Link here : (guide_ENG.PDF) 
    https://drive.google.com/file/d/0Bzyu-7UZdweEUEdRR0tmLWFFTnM/view

    I have Update this game
    Version 1.3a :

    - fix item USB.

    - fix bug : secret room , title menu, ...

    - remove link : ADF.LY

    - Update : file Guide

    I have read the comments and view video, it makes sense to me.

    Thank you for playing !!

    (Sr! Because i bad english, i have use translate.google....)
     
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    It is ok, the good thing is that you make it better and better! ;)   :)   :thumbsup-right:

    Downloading it.
     
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    @Dreadshadow ty !

    Yes, I have read the comments. thank you very much !

    Folder / Language : You can editing your language from the file.

    (Sr! Because i bad english, i have use translate.google....for this game xD)

    Thank you for playing !!

    and the comments 
     
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    Review on Version 1.3 (not included in event)

    :)   :thumbsup-right:  Credits fixed!

    You are amazing and fast on fixing stuff.

    Try putting light to fireplace.  ;)   :D

    Where is the hammer?

    How do I get it?  :|

    Change the message "It is too dark can't see anything" into  "Nothing important here" or "Nothing special".

    It makes more sense.  :D
     
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    I do my job sir! i can not cut the rope with the knife =(
     
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    The crate move between maps should be introduced a little better. It is a sudden curve of complexity, I mean you just started a game and you can do SO fancy things. (Now I can see why this guy has only one place for map transfer.  :p

    Not sure but I think there is a way to have an event there to transfer player and also handle crate.  :)

    It seems from the video that the game just needs some fixes and enhancements to become a gem.

    You are not far from it @kenjivn14 and I want to see it perfected, to review it with better score.  :D   ;)   ;)   ;)
     
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    @Dreadshadow Oh, I have missed your important comment
    It's in the button Spoiler
    At that time I was just a child/ Now I have learned and continue to do games
    Thanks again for giving me useful advice.
     
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    Today i made my video with status public

    It's just hint. Not full walkthrough
     
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