Sweetladyamy's Poetry

[sweetladyamy]

Obviously, things have changed since I last posted anything.

Be as it that may, I didn't want to be viewed as a dark individual, but that was prevented, thanks a bunch for that. Hmph.

Judita's Reprieve:

Gather around, listen well...

For the day comes to bring you Hell...

See my mouth move, hear my words...

These words are your saving grace...

I tell you now, pay no heed

To the everyday man's lies and Greed...

Take your pride, and your shame...

Live not for the fortune and fame!

Hear me out, you got it right...

Fear not the dark, yet fear the light!!

...

And so I live the dream...on and on and on it plays the same old song...

The song I know, the song I once loved...plays like a broken record...

I gave up my hopes, my dreams, for a chance at success...

But it was all for naught, so now I must digress...

There's a road, well worn by time, that takes me back to the broken heart city...

Back in time, back in history, where life brought me no pity...

I cast a stone on the road, in the hopes that it would crumble...

But instead a car whizzes by, and turns that ******* stone to rubble...

I give that rude driver the middle finger, but he just drives on...

Blaring that bull**** music from his piece of **** car he had stolen...

It makes me mad, it drives me nuts...

Makes me wanna throw up my guts...

But instead I take down his license plate number...

...

Hey you, have you heard?

A sin is a sin, and you're no saint!

How much did you say I owe you!?

You're a greedy punk! How dare you!?!!

Oh, so now you drop your pants...

And expect me to give you ****!??!???!!!

...

Sirens, flashing lights...

Surround me as I reflect

On my latest act of violence...

Of course, I get blamed...

For forsaking my own shame...

As the handcuffs are placed on my wrists...

And I'm thrown into the abyss...

All I see is Corruption, Hate and Malice...

This is what the world is full of...

And that is why that pervert got his brains blown out...

...

Do I understand these rights!?!!!

Why don't you just **** off!?!!!

I struggle against these chains...

I want them off, I WANT THEM OFF!!!

My anger builds, my rage flows...

Soon, I'm SEEING RED!!!!

...

The fire within...The anger hidden...

The rage flowing...My body burning...

And...I...Snap...

...

I break these chains, and roll this car...

I smash the window, and start the brawl!!!

They pull their tasers, they pull their guns...

But none of their ******* firearms...

Can take down my raging fire claws!!!!!

I take electrodes, countless bullets...

I take skin, muscle and even bone!

Ripping them apart, limb from limb...

My rampage is front page headlines!!!

...

Sixteen...

Sixteen...

The counts of murder I'd be facing...

But the moment my victory had come...

My rage had slowed, my consciousness returned...

And my body heaved...

I fell to the ground, broken, bloodied, beaten...

As I lay here, I thought 'I rather would have been eaten'...

Sirens, flashing lights surround me...

As I draw my last breath...

The medics try to revive me, but I signify their failure with my middle finger and a smile...

...

A car horn honks, and my eyes spring open...

'It was all a dream?' I asked, and the car horn honked again.

But it wasn't for me. However, I'm glad to be awake, at least, for now...

[End]

Now, whomever thinks I'm just a lady of violence better read this ballad and interpret the real message within.

Because, violence is not in my nature. It is merely a reflection of how I react to the way 100% of the global population treats me without reason.

 

[Sharm]

That isn't music either, I'll split it off into it's own topic instead of hiding it but I won't do it again. Feel free to change the thread title. Please only post your own music in the post your music thread.

 

[sweetladyamy]

That isn't music either, I'll split it off into it's own topic instead of hiding it but I won't do it again. Feel free to change the thread title. Please only post your own music in the post your music thread.

It may not have a link to a song because it hasn't been recorded, but it is one of my songs. Just lyrics, yes, for now.

I am a songwriter.

These are lyrics with pitch, that are sung.

These are lyrics without pitch, that are spoken, shouted or even screamed. These lyrics are extremely emoted.

And it is a song about someone I once knew, who suffered major time from schizophrenia, and bi-polar disorder. She currently resides in a psychiatric hospital, and has lost pretty much, her grip on reality, not even knowing her first name. She only knows that it is a dream she wishes to awaken from.

 

[Simon D. Aelsi]

Sorry but I have to agree with sharm.  Unless there's actual music to be HEARD (Even if it's you singing the lyrics) then it's not music. It's just poetry.
It's very interesting though.

It flows kinda like an erratic free verse.

I noticed that there's almost no rhyme scheme to this. Is that intentional?

You also don't seem to take feedback well at all.  That... won't help you as an artist... :/

Anyway, best of luck to you.

 

[Sharm]

You can change the title to say "Lyrics" instead of poetry, that's fine.  If you want to argue about a moderator action though, you take it to PM, you don't argue in the thread.  It's in the forum rules.

 

[sweetladyamy]

Sorry but I have to agree with sharm.  Unless there's actual music to be HEARD (Even if it's you singing the lyrics) then it's not music. It's just poetry.

It's very interesting though.

It flows kinda like an erratic free verse.

I noticed that there's almost no rhyme scheme to this. Is that intentional?

You also don't seem to take feedback well at all.  That... won't help you as an artist... :/

Anyway, best of luck to you.

1. Ever heard of a group named Pitchshifter? (British Punk Rock)

The rhyme Scheme is to the rhythm and tempo of the song, not so much the words themselves rhyming (though they do somewhat).

It's attuned to a Metal, or Hard Rock rhythm, that slows down during the sung parts.

2, When you are suddenly knocked overboard like that, you tend to react a bit differently to feedback. That was just an example of me feeling a bit confused and frantically looking for an answer.

2a. Normally, unless someone is trolling me (I've gotten a lot of those too), I react assertively. Of course, if someone is absolutely gushing over my work, I tend to be flirty in return.

3. I wonder if I could use my Guitar Hero microphone for recording vocals...it is USB...

3a. Erratic free verse...yeah that sounds about right. I do have a lot of inspiration from artists who use that kind of style, like SLAYER. But some of my inspiration comes from Traditional and New Age styles, like how to fear not the dark, but fear the light. Of course, you could also say that I'm taking a page from Dragonforce's book, and you'd be right saying so.

4. Thank you.