The Griffin's Scroll

[Yuki Harada]

Hey Guys! This is my new game, 'The Griffin's Scroll'.
 
I've been working on it for... I don't know, 2 or 3 days? And about, an hour a day...
 
Storyline
 

Spoiler

Eden once goes out to fish for his mother. While he is gone, a man has came to take him to a place where he is urgently needed. That place is Moorcliff. He will be trained in an Academy. Academy name: None
So far, that is all of the storyline. The scripts are very advanced, so it's taking quite a long time for each scene. I cannot tell you all the details because that would take far too long. (Starter Location: Imp Island) !!Storyline update!! 24th March 2013 Academy is now called 'Moorcliff' not 'Moorcliff Academy', just 'Moorcliff' ^.^
Phar and the Jungle Girl will go inside, and say 'It's beautiful inside...' but when you go inside, you are teleported to a different place and you have to go through a maze which is like an entry test (You won't have to do that everytime, just once, just saying)! All the updates for now, the maze took long to make.

 
Characters
 

Spoiler

 
Name: Eden Howl
Class: Mage
Civilization: Middle Class
Role: Main Character
 
Name: Jaiiyn
Class: None (She will not be in any battles)
Civilization: Middle Class
Role: Eden Howl's Mother
 
Name: Shun
Class: Priest
Civilization: Upper Class
Age: 14
Role: Eden's Party Member
 
Name: ???
Gender: Female
Class: Jungle Warrior
Civilization: ???
Birth Place: Somewhere in the Jungle
 
Name: Phar
Gender: Male
Class: Blademaster
Civilization: ???
 

Features:
 

• Side Battle View
• Nice Avatars
• Smooth Graphics
• Beautiful Scenery
• Custom Music (Names will be in Credits at end of the Game)

Some Screenshots!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2FFBQ0K26bw

Spoiler

 
Start at the bottom for it to make sense, apart from the title screen. (Just a hat tip >.<)

 

V !!Update below!! V (05 August 2013)

Spoiler

So I know I haven't really updated this page for a long time, but I have been working on the game. I can't put up a video yet because I'm running out of memory on my computer and I can't bare the though of another few GB going to something which doesn't really benefit anyone. I'll be uploading screenshots soon, but the updates are as follows.

Added a lot more skills you can steal with 'Lancet'. I've made a few more maps, I've made maps look more natural and there are actually freaking NPCs that roam the maps instead of just you and a weird fish-lady.

Moorcliff:

The school inside is pretty cool and I'm working on the main quest line and also adding in sub quests to help you on the side so that the bosses don't knock you down. I've also made a few animations of my own and got a few from the internet and a guy who's really got at art from my school has done some for me on I think its called like CS5 or something (idk).

So basically the storyline (I don't have time to write up all of it now and I don't want to reveal all because otherwise there would be no point in playing it) is that when you go to moorcliff school when you're about to go inside it teleports you into a maze which is basically a test to see if you're allowed to get into the school. In the maze there are riddles, puzzles, and a boss which gives you your first "Fear" skill. Fear skills do no damage or a small amount of damage but are mainly used for inflicting status ailments.

Inside the school you will choose an element path and you will also learn about the Griffin's Scroll. To the East of the school there will be a town where you can get your first house (unless you like your School Dormitory) and there will be lots of sub-quests and shops. I'm also trying to add in features so you can interact with everything, and I'm also going to try and make more Cutscenes just to make the game more interesting, but I won't make lots of cutscenes because some games have loads and I personally find it annoying if every few seconds on a Quest there's a Cutscene. Just my opinion.

Sooooooooooooo yeah there's still more to come and I'll write in more detail about the updates and stuff so ummmmm bye guys!

Also, if no one makes any extra posts I might not bother to update this forum because if no one's reading it then there's no point... So please put a post below even if its just one person I'll write this for you.

Yuki

 

 

[Archeia]

I will approve this but you have 48 hrs to add more substance to your topic. Tell us about your game not just some list of features and screenshots. I also moved this to Early Project Feedback since this doesn't follow the rules in Project Development.

 

[Ruby]

Is there a way for you to make your screens bigger? I want to give adequate feedback on how I feel about them, but I'm practically blind and those mini screens don't help. What I will say, however is that your Title is very catchy! It sounds pretty interesting.

But, that's about it because there is absolutely nothing else you have given us! I'd love to know about your world and lore, please allow us to criticize constructively, or remove the topic until you have enough for us to crave~ So far, it's bland and the only thing I can like is the title.  

 

[Yuki Harada]

Sorry. I'll make them enlarged now! Archeia I'll add the storyline to it soon.

 

[Yuki Harada]

Here's a video of (probably) one of the last battles in the game! Yes, I know, you don't really need all the party to be level 99 but I didn't want it to take too long. So yeah, here it is! Also - I'm making a gameplay series (2 of ?? done so far) and I will upload all of them in a massive update soon. If there aren't any updates for a while just know that I'll be releasing a huge one soon.




Storyline

Spoiler

Eden once goes out to fish for his mother. While he is gone, a man has came to take him to a place where he is urgently needed. That place is Moorcliff. He will be trained in an Academy. Academy name: None

So far, that is all of the storyline. The scripts are very advanced, so it's taking quite a long time for each scene. I cannot tell you all the details because that would take far too long. (Starter Location: Imp Island) !!Storyline update!! 24th March 2013 Academy is now called 'Moorcliff' not 'Moorcliff Academy', just 'Moorcliff' ^.^

Phar and the Jungle Girl will go inside, and say 'It's beautiful inside...' but when you go inside, you are teleported to a different place and you have to go through a maze which is like an entry test (You won't have to do that everytime, just once, just saying)! All the updates for now, the maze took long to make.

Characters

Spoiler

Name: Eden Howl

Class: Mage

Civilization: Middle Class

Role: Main Character

Name: Jaiiyn

Class: None (She will not be in any battles)

Civilization: Middle Class

Role: Eden Howl's Mother

Name: Shun

Class: Priest

Civilization: Upper Class

Age: 14

Role: Eden's Party Member

Name: ???

Gender: Female

Class: Jungle Warrior

Civilization: ???

Birth Place: Somewhere in the Jungle

Name: Phar

Gender: Male

Class: Blademaster

Civilization: ???

Screenshots

Spoiler

As you can see, there are some screenshots on my first post. The rest will be updated here.

 

[Ruby]

You should probably add that to your first post! That is what most people are going to see first. 

Also, the spoiler. Some people have really awful internet connection, you should probably add all those images under a spoiler. [*spoiler] <- Without the asterisks.

 

[Yuki Harada]

OK, will do.

 

[mlogan]

I too was highly intrigued by the title.  It's great.  I was a little disappointed with the lack of information, and in particular, what if anything, your storyline has to do with a Griffin and his scroll.  I would really sit down and try to work most of the storyline at some point instead of making up as you go.  Right now, it is a very generic plot.  Also, I would really work on maping skills as well.  Your maps are not bad necessarily, but they are very, very bare, therefore boring.  Please know, I am not trying to be mean, just giving some honest feedback of things you can do to improve this. 

 

[Archeia]

That's acceptable but please edit your first post and avoid double posting.

 

[Yuki Harada]

Mmk sorry Archeia.

I too was highly intrigued by the title. It's great. I was a little disappointed with the lack of information, and in particular, what if anything, your storyline has to do with a Griffin and his scroll. I would really sit down and try to work most of the storyline at some point instead of making up as you go. Right now, it is a very generic plot. Also, I would really work on maping skills as well. Your maps are not bad necessarily, but they are very, very bare, therefore boring. Please know, I am not trying to be mean, just giving some honest feedback of things you can do to improve this.

I have a plan of it. At moorcliff there will be a sacred scroll;

therefore the Griffins Scroll. This was going to be in later updates. I'll tell you more later I have to go.

 

[mlogan]

I have a plan of it. At moorcliff there will be a sacred scroll;

therefore the Griffins Scroll. This was going to be in later updates. I'll tell you more later  I have to go.

That's fine, this forum section is Early Project Feedback, so I gave my feedback.  I would recommend if you do have these things worked out, then shed some light on it in your original post so that you can get accurate feedback.  People can't give feedback on things they don't know about.   Again, not trying to be rude, just trying to give some advice.

 

[Archeia]

Like I said, don't double post. It's in the rules. I merged them already and you can always just edit any of your posts. Please fix your topic accordingly within 24 hrs.

 

[Yuki Harada]

@Archeia How do I delete my posts!?

 

[mlogan]

Hey Yuki!  It's sounding pretty interesting!  I would love to see some updated screenshots!

 

[MyLordRobinson]

The mapping needs some work as well as the battle system. Nothing, according to your screenshots at least, seems to "flow" very well together. Even the Poison Scratch skill, which is nice in theory, is a bit awkward to read. Perhaps you would do well to go to the WIP thread and see if they can help you with some of these aesthetic problems.

 

[Ichimaru Gin]

You shouldn't let your characters float in the air, during your sideview battle

 

[TheFroMofo]

You shouldn't let your characters float in the air, during your sideview battle

Going along with what Ichimaru said, you should also try to flip some of your battlers if you plan on using sideview (Such as the rat in one of the screenshots).