United: Cell 3: The Quest For White

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In short This game is a short story, in the form of an RPG, it is based off my own book that I am in the process of writing. It is a completely unrelated story that takes place in the same mythos.

Starting synopsis: The Quest for White, a story of sci-fi, fantasy, super powers, and all sorts of other genres. You start out as Orange, an entry level assassin with the ability to control earth, along with your three teammates, Violet, Gray, and Blue. Soon finding out that your homeworld is under total siege by an army of mysterious and deadly soldiers named The Blood of the Fallen. After arriving in your apartment's lobby, you come across Jared Bright, who kidnaps the leader of your world. After a battle with one of Jared's minions, you wake up in Cell 3 Palace. You learn you have been tasked with finding White and killing Jared. You travel from universe to universe in search of Jared and White...

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After fighting your way through a castle, you happen to come across Jared and a knight captain, when Orange and co. attempt to take on Jared, he makes his escape. In a search, the crew runs into the knight captain who is soon defeated in battle, in his sense of honor, he tells you Jareds plan, to collect the Shards of Light that are rumoured to have control over something, and just happened to have gotten the last one. Orange now returns to the palace to discover it has been attacked. Fighting their way through they learn that Jared's home has been discovered, and they must go there to confront The Blood of the Fallen. Halfway into the base, the world suddenly shifts into a nightmarish reflection of what it was. In wandering the new world they finally come across Jared, who reveals the goal of the Blood of the Fallen, to avenge those killed by the assassins. After a brief debate, Jared reveals that this world was what the Shards controlled, a pocket dimention that can be controlled with one's mind. In this control Jared transforms himself into a godly version of himself. The following battle can lead to two endings: The bad ending involves Orange's team dying and White killing Jared, the other involves Orange killing Jared, saving White, and becoming one of White's personal bodyguards.

The Multiverse: This game takes place in a far future that takes place after space travel and all that jazz,

United is actually a mythos that expands much larger than this game. In United Cell 3, you take part in the events that happen to Cell 3. Cell 3 itself is a planet entirely manmade, with a main planetary focus on assassins. The idea of killing isn't as severe for citizens of Cell 3, since the consider your contribution in life to be a true virtue (in short, the severity of theft and murder have been switched around.) Many of the assassins work off world in “Simplanets” or planets that are convinced they are Earth in a certain time period. The actual Earth however is a giant slum, devoid of civilization that isn't crime based. There are also several world outside of influence of Cell 3's government, which either belong to the alliance or are rogue societies. The Alliance is Cell 3's partner society and are often considered one in the same, but the Alliance is arbitrary in this story. Many rogue societies are unsupported either due to political differences or are militant toward Cell 3. Also on an unrelated note, none of the characters you play as are 100% human, they are actually part Ulti, an alien with the ability to harness chaos energy, which gives it's user superpowers.

Character Bios:

Name: Orange Tajkam

Ability: Earth

Role: Leader

Character Arctype: Traitless

Bio: Born in Cell 3 to a family of rank 7 or lower assassins, Orange aspires to become a level 8 assassin. Orange specializes in using his powers to defeat the enemy, his power being to control all manner of carbon based non-sentient objects (Read: Rocks, dust, diamonds, ect). He doesn't have much personality to speak of but if a great strategist and personally leads his group of assassins. This character is specifically without a heavy personality to help ease the player into their role as being Orange.

Name: Gray Tanner

Ability: Magnetically repels lead

Role: Strong Protagonist

Character Archetype: Crazy killer / crazy romantic

Bio: The ensemble darkhorse of the group, Gray is always either thinking about murdering people or women, and sometimes he thinks about both. He also has an unhealthy obsession with blades, working solely with swords. His past is dark, when he was adopted in his teenage years by a lovely couple, it quickly turned out that said couple wanted nothing but to torture somebody. Gray took it upon himself to develop a liking to the torture. Upon discovering he was liking being hurt physically, the parents took to mental tactics, forcing him to watch people die or kill them directly. Gray did the same thing with this, he found joy in slaughter and looked forward to murder. After torturing his own parents to death, Gray found nowhere to turn to, so he joined up with bounty hunting.

Name: Blue Thafter

Ability: Mist Control

Role: Medic

Character Archetype: Friendly, warm, smart.

Bio: Blue had grown up in Africa when Magicca (A famous scientist) was trying to build a town. He had taken Blue as an apprentice and taught him about the world of science. While Magicca had tried to stay omnidiciplinary in his teachings, Blue had taken a liking to medicine and explosives. Blue grew up learning how to both reattach somebody's arm, and how to blow it off. When he was offered to try out for Cell 3 he first refused, but he given a deal that he could kidnap his targets and experiment on them. Blue took this offer and signed up, passing the exam with flying colors.

Name: Violet Jameson

Ability: Fire

Role: Token female, voice of reason

Character Archetype: Sarcastic and snarky

Bio: Violet started out her life on Earth, working for one of the many traveling gangs. She became a very accurate marksman in her early years, being able to snipe people with a pistol. She grew up to become a gun runner through the abandoned streets of Britain. When a rival gang hired a Cell 3 assassin to kill Violet, she turned the tables and sabotaged the bounty hunter's gun and had it explode on him. Upon discovery of one who could kill his own assassin, White had offered her to join. When she declined White had set a bounty on every member of Violet's gang. Broken and homeless, Violet gave into White's request and joined up with Cell 3.

Name: Jared Bright

Ability: Explosions

Role: Antagonist

Character Archetype: Heroic, mysterious.

Bio: Jared lived in a 23rd century simplanet, after having his parents brutally killed by an assassin he desperately searched for answers in an attempt for bring the killer to justice. He came across a Cell 3 contractor who explained to him what Cell 3 was, intending on scoring a contract. Instead Jared has taken the universe jumper from the contractor and traveled to a rogue planet. Upon entering this planet he had found a lodge full of like minded individuals with plans on destroying Cell 3. Jared had expressed that there was a better way to stop them, instead wishing to turn them away from being killers and for them to live a nice life. Jared furiously searched for a way to go through with his plan. After running through some archives he came across some tech that created a pocket dimension, one that could be controlled if he had collected the Shards of Light. Jared then learned that White had planned of collecting every Shard of Light in hopes of collecting lost info on the past. While the Shards of Light needed to control the pocket dimension were four specific ones, he couldn't afford losing any of them. Jared now plans to launch an attack on White to make sure he can't get the Shards first

Screenshots: http://morpho1996.imgur.com

Download link: http://www.mediafire...nno5vcshgbus83s

Note: United: Cell 3 is a planned trilogy, the main point of the 3 stories are to showcase 3 different morality types: Grey and gray, grey and black, and black and white, this features the Grey and Gray, with niether the antagonist or protagonist being a better person, one side are assassins, the other side is mass torture and brainwashing, niether side is a better choice.

Hey guys, this is my first RPGmaker game ever, if I made any mistakes, feel free to point it out.
 
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I will approve this but you have 24 hours to fix this topic, notably, your Screenshots Gallery is private and unviewable. I also fixed your tags.
 

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Okay, screenshots should be fixed, I've set it for public viewing

For those who want to see my book (It'll be in progress for a long time, I don't write in it that often) https://docs.google....vwJRFmaezA/edit

Download counter: 50

Well this is odd, one of my friends informed me that the term "Blood of the Fallen" is in World of Warcraft and Runescape, so anyone thinking it's a reference to that, it's not, I just happen to have come up with the same term.

I will approve this but you have 24 hours to fix this topic, notably, your Screenshots Gallery is private and unviewable. I also fixed your tags.
Is there a way to delete my previous comment by the way? I kinda want to get rid of them up discovering I can edit pre-existing commentsSo far I've gotten 50 downloads, I'd really appreciate feedback, what I did wrong, what I did right, story analysis, all that fun stuff, I don't want this post to be just me talking to myself
 
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I have completed the whole game. It's my first RPG I played, from this site, and I liked it.

The story was realy well written. It's not that long of a story, but you said you wanted to make a triology, PLEASE DO IT.

The characters were a little bit basic. A guy that likes the girls and had a bad youth, a sarcistic girl, etc.

But that doesn't make it bad, it's kinda fun. The end boss was very good, it was a tough fight, but I won.

It's nice if the endboss isn't bad, but also not extremly good.

Only 1 bad thing. The textboxes where sometimes with a dot at the end, sometimes not, and the first letter was sometimes a capital letter, sometimes not,

(and 1 thing in the ice level wasn't correct, it was 1/4 tree) if you would work on those little things, it would be more clean to play.

Short:

-Good story

-Characters basic, but funny

-Good end boss

-Some little flaws

-Make a triology! (when is the book going to be published?)

PS: Sorry for bad English, im from Holland
 

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I have completed the whole game. It's my first RPG I played, from this site, and I liked it.

The story was realy well written. It's not that long of a story, but you said you wanted to make a triology, PLEASE DO IT.

The characters were a little bit basic. A guy that likes the girls and had a bad youth, a sarcistic girl, etc.

But that doesn't make it bad, it's kinda fun. The end boss was very good, it was a tough fight, but I won.

It's nice if the endboss isn't bad, but also not extremly good.

Only 1 bad thing. The textboxes where sometimes with a dot at the end, sometimes not, and the first letter was sometimes a capital letter, sometimes not,

(and 1 thing in the ice level wasn't correct, it was 1/4 tree) if you would work on those little things, it would be more clean to play.

Short:

-Good story

-Characters basic, but funny

-Good end boss

-Some little flaws

-Make a triology! (when is the book going to be published?)

PS: Sorry for bad English, im from Holland
I'm glad you liked it, and sorry for the writing and graphical errors. I'm busy with the design process of the next game, it will feature more intricate characters, more mechanics (I'm playing around with level gimmicks and an ever changing party.) The story and game will be deeper and longer with even more hidden goodies. I'm currently held back by the fact that I used the trial version to make this, as in I currently have half a project sitting on my computer without any way to finish it.

This was actually my first RPG and I'm very glad to get positive feedback on it, I had started creating this game with no prior game making experience what-so-ever.

I'm probably not finishing my book anytime soon because I don't write much. These characters will be included and expanded upon in my book, late in the book though.

I have completed the whole game. It's my first RPG I played, from this site, and I liked it.

The story was realy well written. It's not that long of a story, but you said you wanted to make a triology, PLEASE DO IT.

The characters were a little bit basic. A guy that likes the girls and had a bad youth, a sarcistic girl, etc.

But that doesn't make it bad, it's kinda fun. The end boss was very good, it was a tough fight, but I won.

It's nice if the endboss isn't bad, but also not extremly good.

Only 1 bad thing. The textboxes where sometimes with a dot at the end, sometimes not, and the first letter was sometimes a capital letter, sometimes not,

(and 1 thing in the ice level wasn't correct, it was 1/4 tree) if you would work on those little things, it would be more clean to play.

Short:

-Good story

-Characters basic, but funny

-Good end boss

-Some little flaws

-Make a triology! (when is the book going to be published?)

PS: Sorry for bad English, im from Holland
If you're interested, I could use someone with the software who'd be willing to work with me, I've already got some intro made, however you'd have to be doing a lot of the grunt work.
 
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Do you already have the full version? Otherwise I could help you out and make a part of the game.

Although you may still post the game, I only want some little credit or something like that then.

Because part 1 was awesome, and the idea of storytelling, looks kinda on the way I do.

So I hope I can help you out!
 

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This looks alright. I'm gonna download it and give it a go. I've been kinda out of the loop with playing other RPG maker games anyway. I'll make comments as soon as I can.

EDIT: Okay, well... I'm kinda mixed.

Positives:

-battles are... fun, at least.

-story's actually very good. I felt everything opened up a bit too quickly, though; it's better to take just a little while for everything to blossom. I didn't expect so much stuff to happen right as I walked off the bed. If you intended a fast pace, then I guess that's excusable. I digress, though; well-written stuff you got here. Probably the best part of the game.

-characters are pretty cool. I like the fact that they're assassins.

Negatives:

-grammar could use work. I also noticed some sentence fragments were too big for the text box.

-spend a bit more time on the mapping; use your tile files to their fullest extents.
 
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Do you already have the full version? Otherwise I could help you out and make a part of the game.

Although you may still post the game, I only want some little credit or something like that then.

Because part 1 was awesome, and the idea of storytelling, looks kinda on the way I do.

So I hope I can help you out!
I only really have the intro partially programmed, and I intended the game to be full length instead of being short like this one is.
 

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This looks alright. I'm gonna download it and give it a go. I've been kinda out of the loop with playing other RPG maker games anyway. I'll make comments as soon as I can.

EDIT: Okay, well... I'm kinda mixed.

Positives:

-battles are... fun, at least.

-story's actually very good. I felt everything opened up a bit too quickly, though; it's better to take just a little while for everything to blossom. I didn't expect so much stuff to happen right as I walked off the bed. If you intended a fast pace, then I guess that's excusable. I digress, though; well-written stuff you got here. Probably the best part of the game.

-characters are pretty cool. I like the fact that they're assassins.

Negatives:

-grammar could use work. I also noticed some sentence fragments were too big for the text box.

-spend a bit more time on the mapping; use your tile files to their fullest extents.
Ya I only had limited beta testing and I tend to skip over thing when I play it for myself, I meant for the story to drag out longer, but the start being quick was fully intentional. I was intending to use the software to it's full potential in the sequel, aaaand then I ran out of time in the trial version, I'm working on saving money to buy the actual software, but right now I'm not able to work on it. I sent out a request to work with people on making the game, but got a bad reaction.
 

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Aaaaah, okay.

Still an alright game, though. Good job on doing what you could.
 

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Aaaaah, okay.

Still an alright game, though. Good job on doing what you could.
Ya, as far as my ability to make a game goes, this was my first time ever designing anything even resembling a game. So even though it has many faults, I'm pretty happy with what I did accomplish.Expect a sequel to contain character changing, a longer story, better characters, more intuitive battles, and a general makover when it comes to level design. This is my link for the sequel competition if you're interested, but be warned, it spoils the plot. Nobody seems to be interested in the competition, so I'm probably making the sequels for myself.

http://forums.rpgmakerweb.com/index.php?/topic/4412-united-cell-3-blackblood-now-a-contest/
 

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Just shouting out that I now have a development poll, feel free to fill it out.
 

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