T-thank you very much!!! If that's not too much, pretty please. I'll give you the detail info with PM. Again, thank you very much for tying the game, pointing out the bug and offering the help with opening music... tho I have to say, we cannot pay you but we are willing to trade skills, credit you in the game and give you a free copy of the game once finished and our eternal gratitude... I hope is that okay with you.
I'd say I disagree. The game is obviously not perfect but it is a very good game and one of the few I have ever play as a DEMO and love it, as I have tried many bad games. The intro is awesome, and the characters are interesting as well as the story. Clearly, the developers are not trying to make a perfect ground breaking game of the centuries but give damn good effort to the demo and make it simple and cool.This demo seemed to have been positively received so far....now get ready for some harsh criticism. Keep in mind the following is just my 2 cents.
Design
1. Why do you have in game graphics in your intro movie? It killed the mood and coolness of the movie and felt out of place.
2. Menu wallpaper is kinda annoying and distracting.
3. Haru is not a silent protagonist and you have graphics showing things..I dont need every scene to be explained to me.
4. Mog loading screen? Cmon it is very annoying, what makes you think people want to wait another 3 seconds and look at a book.
5. Mog map name is annoying too. Also lets say you are in the dorm then you get out and the map name appears...that does not make sense you did not just got to the dorm you have been there already.
6. The transition from the shrine to the forest needs to be more smooth (fade bgm, fade tint instead of what you are doing it feels weird)
7. You give the player choices so it feels like you can control her personality but her battle voice has 1 clear personality.
8. When you leave a map from the road you get transferred to the next map but your on the side walk..why?
9. There are two people talking in front of school and they have comments on top..why only them? aren't others talking too? keep it consistent.
10. Walking up to your bedroom is annoying, can you make a transfer somehow from the lobby?
Mapping
1. Exterior mapping is generally nice.
2. Interior mapping is awful. So much blank open space, just look at the school 2nd and 3rd floor..you cant possibly think that's sexy mapping.
3. Map error drink vending machine both lobby and 2nd floor.
Bugs.
1. Khas lighting turns on a split second after you enter the room, looks sloppy.
2. When use Ice prison, Haru says the "damaged voice" then after the animation she does the same voice again.
3. When using a tonic you get the "recovery voice" Twice.
4. Little dialogue errors here and there.
5. I cant save more then twice? Or I cant save when I close the program then reopen the program.
Suggestions
1. Have cars drive by, that would be cool.
2. I also hope that the RTP tiles and music are just place holders (this is commercial)
3. And everything else in the Design list.
What I like
1. Decent artwork and OC
2. Nice intro movie minus..the in game graphics.
3. Nice INTRO! I was hooked! Then I woke up and it got boring.
4. I like what happens to people when they die in the "dream"
5. Nice eventing skills.
I know I sound harsh and that I think it is a bad game, but overall I feel like this is a decent game. Very above average, commercial quality? No. But then again it is just my 2 cents. You definitely have the skills to make a good game. Hope you made use of my critics.
-NC
Edit: I forgot to add. You say that even though persona is an inspiration, this game is it's own thing. I disagree I think this is a complete rip from persona, which is not a bad thing.
the game is only about 20% finished and a lot of things/flaws can be fixed. If you are disappointed by the game, please give us another chance with new version update. 
Thanks for having a go at VSI demoHey, Somael. Since you've agreed to play-test my game, I thought it only appropriate that I do the same for you.
I have found quite a lot of good things and bad things in this demo. Some of the bad things were already mentioned by NinjaChrome but I'll go ahead and echo things whether they were mentioned before or not.
-Opening is awesome!
-But I agree with Ninja that the in-game graphics mess it up. I would get those out of there. Is that an original song for the game? Just curious.
-The story and setting and all that seem very good but there are several big things that I would love to see fixed in the final version.
-You need someone with exceptional grammar to proof-read the ENTIRE game. Spelling and grammar errors are plentiful and you definitely don't want that hurting your professional image on your first commercial release.
-Like Ninja said, you have a LOT of text that explains every little thing you character is doing. I would remove as much of that as possible. Showing is better than telling.
-The clock ticking SE is too loud, I think. That could grind on people's nerves after a while.
-What you are trying to achieve with your interior maps is good. You just need to shrink everything down to remove all the empty space and you'll be good. FF6 doesn't have that much walking space and it works well.
-The blowing leaves at school are beautiful!
-The text of random people's conversation on screen at the school is GENIUS! I want to do that when I make an RPG!
Overall, this is going to be a great game, I think. There are lots of Zelda clones out there. I don't know of any Persona clones. Make it a good one and you could possibly get a lot of sales for this. I would buy it. I've got to say, I can KIND of see why people look down on RTP. Although, the graphics didn't bother me, hearing the same sound effects and music that are in my own game kind of bothered me. I will have an original soundtrack but going a step further and having original sound effects would do wonders for our games as well. So that's what I'm going to do. It sounds like you have a need for heavy metal. I unfortunately do not have time to write an entire game soundtrack for free but I would love to contribute a couple of metal songs to your game and be credited for them in the credits and/or documentation. Are you interested in something like that?
Let's both work hard and put in the effort to make our games as awesome as they can be, Somael!
. . Please, I am interested in using them, and they will be credited fully both in-game and additional documentation.Thanks for helping us with OSTs, TYG4R and Zoltan since this what we need the most.
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Thanks for the feedback, The Dialogs become no.1 in "To Fix" listOkay, I think I've played enough to give a decent critique.
The For Dummies stuff at the beginning might be a problem, they'll be copyrighted.
The opening movie, while impressive, it is annoying that it can't be skipped.
Some of the maps seem to be overly large and some seem to lag a fair bit.
I certainly see the Persona in this now; the beginning still reminds me of Silent Hill so a game that seems to cross those will always be interesting
I do need to say again about the dialogue; it is obvious that English isn't your first language and it is hard to become immersed into the game with so many little mistakes and strange choices of words.
Anyway, the game does look very interesting but still needs some polish
. *The quest for a proof reader begins! .
I'm more than happy to offer my service in this regard.
I really appreciate the offerI'm more than happy to offer my service in this regard.
Though I think I would recommend a couple; not everyone will catch everything - I know my English isn't perfect either
Plus you could break the script up so people arrn't all doing the same bits and get done faster
. Of cuz, you are very much welcome . Keep in touch with us 
That's fine. Do you have an ETA on the game yet btw?I really appreciate the offer
The game is only about 20% finished tho. I think it's better to start proof-reading only after the game has been finally developed (or at least beta version)
We'll PM you again, if you are still interested to do by that time
) It's little touches like this that really help a game, if you ask me
Oh!!! If you have problem saving it, try to run the game as administrator (Right click and Choose 'Run as administrator). It'll solve the problem
. We will add the skipping functions in future update (like skipping movie and giving short cuts to places). Do give us your feedback once you finished the game Err... that's a bit difficult to guess,it will take another 4-5 months at least to produce a beta version (owning to the fact we can only work on the game only at the free time).That's fine. Do you have an ETA on the game yet btw?
A few comments I forgot to add to my mini review;
I did like the little name change joke with the teacher (Akira maybe? I forget
While I do like that the dialogue of all the environmental characters seem to change just about every day, the fact that they pretty much stay put, makes the environments feel a bit static.
