I edited my second post there a bit. I'll still respond to what you wrote above though. 1. I know it's not a story line it's an opening, I know you're talking about execution. The first is better executed than the second. 2.A fictional king is a clear antagonist, you know what you're going. Your sister vanishing most likely means she's dead, if she isn't then I still don't have any idea what could have taken her, and that opens up about as many questions as the bogus ones you asked about the initial one. I know you think it depends on the execution but the second one as is has failed at executing as well as the first. 3.We basically are saying the same thing, though I can raise many more objections to your original post I just wanted to point out propping up the second example is detrimental to your case. EDIT: One objection that's burning in me is the mention of Ocirina of Times story as something to emulate and well...that's like telling someone to emulate the plot of Contra, that is to pretend to have one to string the levels together.